Pneumonochrome

Here’s the next installment of poetry from my creative writing class.

Rising Giants

Towering monster of red wood arms,
bearing forth verdant hands to greet the sun.
Your most passionate reach beyond the discerning
of grounded eyes.
Those hands grasp the tides
of the ever-living sea above.

Towering
rails
bordering
sheer
paths
to
heaven
Drawing minds to ponder
what is greater, more than they.

Rain
and breath,
the blood and flesh
of life,
course down
your corrugated
canals
to all that seek
to consume another day
on the ground.

You towering monster, scraping the sky,
bring down another breath for me,
still moist from being plucked,
so freshly caught,
out from the heights
of those transcendent waves.

I’m taking a creative writing course right now, and thought I’d post some of the things I’m doing for my assignments. This first one is a poem that was originally called teeth, now titled Discovery. I’ve posted the first draft and the current version (about the 4th revision).

Teeth

Stopping short of the angle in the jaw,
for there you would never wear a single crown of green or red,
you shine as age has made you smooth, as idle age is wont to do.

You were not always clean or dry,
but frequently drenched in blood,
whether milky-white or
rusty-red seeping stains into your faces
and between your rounding cusps.

Your limits existed only in the will
of him who weilded you;
and in his end,
and after his crown and arm and face were worn away,
you remain adorned in lifeless gray,
shining forth to tell the tale of ages washed away.

————————————————–

Discovery

The steel tooth rooted in my hand
tears
and cuts
and crushes
this flesh
of stone and clay,
forcing open another gaping maw before
it
can swallow
another
meal of knowledge.

An angled pocket of time,
Where once a bone had lain,
now digested and fused into the body of the earth,
and you,
subtly suggesting secrets with your stillness,
your age has made you smooth, as idle age is wont to do.

You were not always dull and dry,
but frequently your master’s meals
anointed you with nectar or with blood,
bathing you in sweetness
or
rusting stains into your faces
and between your rounding cusps.

What terrors did you tell, for him?
What destruction did you bring
as he wielded you to satisfy his lusts?
What secrets
did you bite back, and record beyond his knowledge,
so that in his end,
and after his crown and arm and face
were taken for the eating of the earth,
you’d remain adorned in dull and lifeless gray,
yearning yet to tell the tale of ages, lives, and days.

Anyone who’s read this blog before may notice a few changes in the way it’s working. This is because a few things that I was going were cause problems with other things. I was using a really nifty script/modified theme page, and then a really nifty plugin, to include comments on the main page in a dropdown menu, but both the options were causing problems with my html validation. This may come back as I have time to try to validate the html that these things produce, I don’t know.
The html validation problems were suspect in creating other problems, specifically in getting my technorati tags indexed. Well, even after fixing the validation problems, I wasn’t getting my tags indexed, and it seems there’s something about the way the plugin I was using to index my tags was working that was causing things not to work like I wanted them to. So, I’ve switched to a new plugin for technorati (I still use the autometa plugin for generating meta keywords). I’m using Ultimage Tage Warrior now, and it seems like it generates tags that will be properly indexed.
While working on this problem today, we noticed an odd noise coming from the computer, so I opened her up and, while I couldn’t locate the source of the noise, I did find that my hard drives were burning hot. I’d recently installed a second hard drive, and it seems that the space available in which to mount it just packed things too closely together, so I had to remove it and put it somewhere else in the case, unmounted, and I’m hoping that will avoid any heat-related HDD failures. This would, of course, happen while the external HDD that I would like to keep all my vital data on is being RMAd because it failed 5 days after I got it. The link there is to the post I mentioned that in. Oh well. I’d better end this post and get back to trying to find someone to lead the church choir tomorrow in my place, because I’m hoping to be out of town.

Okay, I think I might have finally figured out how to make this work. It seems that originally my Atom feed, which Technorati uses to get my posts, wasn’t giving out the full text, and so if the link didn’t show up there or on the main page, no indexing. I won’t comment on how silly I think this is, that Technorati will send out a spider, but it won’t crawl my sites and actually read the posts there, but hey, I’m sure they have a good reason for it that I’m just not aware of.

(more…)

This is yet another post that will be boring, as I’m using it to test the way these tags should work. I apologize to anyone who is unhappy with the mostly contentless posts that are showing up…

(more…)